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Re: IPA Apprentice: Team Impossible Cash

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<---Represents 'a few you'

On that note I may as well give you a vocabulary lesson while I'm here.

On that note, I may as well give you a vocabulary lesson while I'm here.
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(Silver got a 4/5 on the exam by the way, which he is very proud of).

(Silver got a 4/5 on the exam, by the way, which he is very proud of).
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Silver wrote: (Silver got a 4/5 on the exam by the way, which he is very proud of)

(Silver got a 4/5 on the exam by the way, of which he is very proud.)

I moved the "of" in the sentence.
Weepitang - Gender: Male; Type: Grass, Steel; Abilities: Clear Body, Chlorophyll; Attacks: Take Down, Vine Whip, Psychic, Wrap. Level 17

............ - Gender: Male; Type: Fighting, Flying; Abilities: Guts, Inner Focus; Attacks: Leech Life, Leer, Low Kick, Revenge. Level 15

Sudonette - Gender: Male; Type: Rock, Ghost; Abilities: Insomnia, Rock Head; Attacks: Knock Off, Copycat,Rock throw, Curse. level 5

Metarion(SDC) - Gender: Male; Type: Grass, Metal; Abilities: Shield Dust, Sturdy; Attacks: Metal Claw, Tackle, Mud-Slap, Headbutt. Level 8

Shieldyu(SDC) - Gender: Male; Type: Water, Ground; Abilities: Sturdy, Natural Cure; Attacks: Tackle, Protect, Rapid Spin, take down. Level 5

Lola - Gender: Female; Type: Psychic, Flying; Abilities: Inner Focus, Synchronize; Attacks: Teleport, Leech Life, Leer


Silver wrote:I love you The n00b. You don't have to be jealous of actual n00bs. There's only room in my heart for you. I'm just... disappointed that you left me for so long. It was lonely... you promised you'd write to me, but you never did... the months passed by, and I still thought of you every day, but you never called. I never got any letters from you.

So eventually, I started to lose faith... I thought you had been killed in that terrible, terrible war. Or maybe that you had forgotten about me. It's been so long, you probably found another girl over there... I never stopped loving you, but I didn't think you cared about me anymore, so welcoming you back just would have been too painful for me... I'm sorry. I'm glad you've come back home *sniff*
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(Silver got a 4/5 on the exam
Could be rewritten several ways including:
"Silver got a four-fifths on the exam"
"Silver got a 4/5ths on the exam"
"Silver got a four out of five on the exam"
"Silver got an 80% on the exam"
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Silver, I think you're either going to have to end this or give me permission to double post answers since no one else has found anything for ages.
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Welll, my solution to this situation was going to be to give hints... unfortunately, I was unable to do so regularly during my time away from Compy. So what I'm gonna do is make the seven remaining mistakes a bit more obvious, and give you guys until the end of the week to fix them. Double posting... will be allowed, but there has to be at least two hours between them.

In the first paragraph, there's still a comma missing in the second sentence and in the last sentence. Toward the end of the paragraph there's a fragment - which we could debate was used for effect, but sounds better if it's made into a full sentence - and a word that's... technically not a word. Or at least, we weren't allowed to use it in AP English. I mean, I use it all the time, and I'm probably not gonna stop, but...

In the second paragraph, there's a comma missing, a sentence ending in a preposition, and then a run-on sentence towards the end.
"Irregardless" and "Over exaggerated" are NEVER CORRECT EVER because they are redundant
Regardless means "without regard", and adding "ir" on the front actually makes it a double negative; exaggerate means "to overstate" so you're literally saying "over overstate."
Example: I can not exaggerate the importance of this fact enough, regardless of how often people ignore it.
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I was gonna go for more of a Marik thing anyway, hence the name change to Steve.

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Watching you guys suffer is what I live for.

In this sentence, for is a preposition, though I'm not sure how I'd replace it.

...I live to watch you guys suffer?
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Oh, spoiler there, people. Watch out.
Oh, spoiler there, people, watch out.

OR

Oh, spoiler there, people; watch out.
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Okay, well not really, but it makes for a good joke.

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Re: IPA Apprentice: Team Impossible Cash

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Silver wrote:(Silver got a fourout of five on the exam

Looks like Silver made an ACTUAL typo.

Do I get points? Or do I have to correct it. If so, I call it. It's mine to correct.

Actual correction:
Silver wrote:I was gonna go for more of a Marik thing anyway hence the name change to Steve.

"Gonna" needs to be changed to "Going to"?
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............ - Gender: Male; Type: Fighting, Flying; Abilities: Guts, Inner Focus; Attacks: Leech Life, Leer, Low Kick, Revenge. Level 15

Sudonette - Gender: Male; Type: Rock, Ghost; Abilities: Insomnia, Rock Head; Attacks: Knock Off, Copycat,Rock throw, Curse. level 5

Metarion(SDC) - Gender: Male; Type: Grass, Metal; Abilities: Shield Dust, Sturdy; Attacks: Metal Claw, Tackle, Mud-Slap, Headbutt. Level 8

Shieldyu(SDC) - Gender: Male; Type: Water, Ground; Abilities: Sturdy, Natural Cure; Attacks: Tackle, Protect, Rapid Spin, take down. Level 5

Lola - Gender: Female; Type: Psychic, Flying; Abilities: Inner Focus, Synchronize; Attacks: Teleport, Leech Life, Leer


Silver wrote:I love you The n00b. You don't have to be jealous of actual n00bs. There's only room in my heart for you. I'm just... disappointed that you left me for so long. It was lonely... you promised you'd write to me, but you never did... the months passed by, and I still thought of you every day, but you never called. I never got any letters from you.

So eventually, I started to lose faith... I thought you had been killed in that terrible, terrible war. Or maybe that you had forgotten about me. It's been so long, you probably found another girl over there... I never stopped loving you, but I didn't think you cared about me anymore, so welcoming you back just would have been too painful for me... I'm sorry. I'm glad you've come back home *sniff*
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Not a typo, has been corrected. Also... I can't find that comma and run-on sentence. ^^
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Silver wrote:Some may see Silver as a macabre megalomaniac, this is not unfounded.
Some may see Silver as a macabre megalomaniac. This is not unfounded.
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Silver wrote:Okay, well not really but it makes for a good joke.
Okay, well not really, but it makes for a good joke. (Comma added after really.)
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Re: IPA Apprentice: Team Impossible Cash

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Josiah wrote:
Silver wrote:Okay, well not really but it makes for a good joke.
Okay, well not really, but it makes for a good joke. (Comma added after really.)
I got that one. =D
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