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Maybe Ill make the next challenge Stand Up Comedy accept that
Maybe Ill make the next challenge Stand Up Comedy, accept that (added comma)
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Cheezdude wrote:"... if Josiah gets the poisition"

Should the I be capitalized after the three dots?
In this case, I wouldn't say so; the two phrases could be combined into one perfectly legitimate sentence using a semicolon or the word 'because'. I hadn't marked it as a mistake before, so I'm afraid you won't get points for that one.
Saber Knight wrote:I was going to de-cap that, but I wasn't sure if it was necessary.

I also have 3 versions of the original paragraph: A copy of the original, a version with all mistakes bolded and the corrections in parenthesis (with the mistakes I corrected in green) and a version with all mistakes just corrected. The 2nd version used to have mistakes to be corrected in blue.
It wasn't neceessary. If you'll notice, I've treated the names of previous rounds (like "IPA Quiz Time!") as proper nouns and given them capital letters. So if Stand Up Comedy is the name of the next round, it would also be capitalized in this situation. There is something else you can do to it to make that more obvious, though.

And not to one-up you or anything, but I have four copies of the paragraph~ One with all teh mistakes, one without any mistakes, one with all the mistakes you've found corrected, and one with all the mistakes pointed out with their point values next to them. On that note, I've put the partially corrected paragraph in the first post. The current scores are there too, although this round is far from over.

Here's a hint: fragments and run-on sentences are grammatical mistakes, too.
"Irregardless" and "Over exaggerated" are NEVER CORRECT EVER because they are redundant
Regardless means "without regard", and adding "ir" on the front actually makes it a double negative; exaggerate means "to overstate" so you're literally saying "over overstate."
Example: I can not exaggerate the importance of this fact enough, regardless of how often people ignore it.
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...can't find any fragments...
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Sound like fun?
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Maybe I'll make the next challenge Stand Up Comedy, except that this is the Internet so I'd have no idea if you actually stood up or not
Maybe I'll make the next challenge IPA Stand Up Comedy, except that this is the Internet so I'd have no idea if you actually stood up or not.
((I'm pretty sure that would make it more obvious. And I'm ahead of Josiah! Yay!))
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It's a fragment if it doesn't have a subject and a verb. There's definitely one in there. And it's not "Watch out" either, because the subject in that case is an implied 'you'.

I could have sworn I recorded the correction to "Sound like fun?" because I know I gave Saber the points for it...

No, Gar, that's not what I meant to make it more obvious. Round 3, "Who's that Mokemon? It's Yu-Gi-Oh: The Abridged Series Reference!" doesn't have "IPA" anywhere in the title.
"Irregardless" and "Over exaggerated" are NEVER CORRECT EVER because they are redundant
Regardless means "without regard", and adding "ir" on the front actually makes it a double negative; exaggerate means "to overstate" so you're literally saying "over overstate."
Example: I can not exaggerate the importance of this fact enough, regardless of how often people ignore it.
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Thank you Silver, that makes things a lot easier.
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When you make a mistake but don't want to admit to it, cracking a joke is a quick easy way to solve the problem.
When you make a mistake but don't want to admit to it, cracking a joke is a quick, easy way to solve the problem.
((comma between quick and easy))
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Congratulations on making it this far by the way.
Congratulations on making it this far, by the way. (comma added)
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Silver wrote:I could have sworn I recorded the correction to "Sound like fun?" because I know I gave Saber the points for it...
I did correct it. At least, according to my paragraph.
His most egregious malfeasance, however, is his tendency to be tendentious. And torpid.
Correction: His most egregious malfeasance, however, is his tendency to be tendentious and torpid.

("And torpid." was a fragment, so I made it part of the previous sentence)
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I can't wait to make the winner leggally change there name to "Steve" for the ocasion.
Steve shouldn't have quotation marks, because no one is speaking. 'Steve' would fit, though.
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Silver has big problems with the torpid.
Silver has big problems with torpidity.
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Now you guys are getting it... there are still some mistakes in there, though.

Here's another hint: I'm usually not particular about this rule, but it's grammatically incorrect to end a sentence with a preposition. Sometimes this results in awkward sentence structure, which is even worse, but you should be able to fix the sentences in these paragraphs easily enough.
"Irregardless" and "Over exaggerated" are NEVER CORRECT EVER because they are redundant
Regardless means "without regard", and adding "ir" on the front actually makes it a double negative; exaggerate means "to overstate" so you're literally saying "over overstate."
Example: I can not exaggerate the importance of this fact enough, regardless of how often people ignore it.
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Well, anyway I hope you guys have been enjoying the competition so far.
Well, anyway, I hope you guys have been enjoying the competition so far. (Added comma after anyway, although there's actually two ways to correct this. You could do what I did and leave it or you could do what I did and also delete the comma after 'well'.)
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What, have you guys given up already? Still a few mistakes in there... that part in parenthesis actually has three errors. Small, but they're there, and switching to third person isn't one of them. (Although I guess you could consider it... I mean, in this situation, it's not really...) There are still couple of commas missing, too. It's still not too late for some of you to save yourselves from the Firing Squad...
"Irregardless" and "Over exaggerated" are NEVER CORRECT EVER because they are redundant
Regardless means "without regard", and adding "ir" on the front actually makes it a double negative; exaggerate means "to overstate" so you're literally saying "over overstate."
Example: I can not exaggerate the importance of this fact enough, regardless of how often people ignore it.
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